<div dir="ltr"><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif;font-size:small;color:#073763">See attached track changes. I find the structural changes to the document much more readable and clear, and the changed JSON structure is more logical and matches my experiences in trying to write and match purposes for collection to types of authority necessary for using and disclosing the PII.</div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif;font-size:small;color:#073763"><br></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif;font-size:small;color:#073763">👍<br></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif;font-size:small;color:#073763"><br></div><div class="gmail_default" style="font-family:verdana,sans-serif;font-size:small;color:#073763"><br></div><div class="gmail_extra"><br clear="all"><div><div class="gmail_signature" data-smartmail="gmail_signature"><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div dir="ltr"><div><div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" size="2"><br></font></div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" size="2"><br><font color="#20124d">John Wunderlich, BA, MBA<br><a href="https://twitter.com/PrivacyCDN" target="_blank">@PrivacyCDN</a></font></font></div><div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" size="2"><br></font></div><div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" size="2"><img src="https://docs.google.com/uc?export=download&id=0B-W7F5c-RcqEZTFDZFhwX0QxOTQ&revid=0B-W7F5c-RcqEcGVnWkZJenFtLzJVeCtXdTR0dDhDUmp2TktJPQ" width="91" height="96"><br></font></div><div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" size="2"><font color="#20124d"><br></font></font></div><div><div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" color="#20124d" size="4"><u>Privacy Tools</u></font></div><div><br></div><div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" size="2" color="#20124d"><a href="https://kantarainitiative.org/" target="_blank">Kantara Initiative</a>: <a href="https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/display/infosharing/Consent+Receipt+Specification" target="_blank">Consent Receipt Specification</a> </font></div><div><font face="verdana, sans-serif" size="2" color="#20124d"><a href="https://www.jlinclabs.com/" target="_blank">JLINC Labs</a>: <a href="https://www.jlinclabs.com/solutions/" target="_blank">Data Provenance Solutions</a></font></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div></div>
<br><div class="gmail_quote">On 30 October 2017 at 15:51, David Turner <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:david.turner@voltagegate.com" target="_blank">david.turner@voltagegate.com</a>></span> wrote:<br><blockquote class="gmail_quote" style="margin:0 0 0 .8ex;border-left:1px #ccc solid;padding-left:1ex"><div lang="EN-US" link="blue" vlink="purple"><div class="m_9114043676421726582WordSection1"><p class="MsoNormal">Thanks Mark.<u></u><u></u></p><p class="MsoNormal"><a name="m_9114043676421726582__MailEndCompose"><u></u> <u></u></a></p><span></span><div><div style="border:none;border-top:solid #e1e1e1 1.0pt;padding:3.0pt 0in 0in 0in"><p class="MsoNormal"><b>From:</b> Mark Lizar [mailto:<a href="mailto:mark@openconsent.com" target="_blank">mark@openconsent.com</a>] <br><b>Sent:</b> Friday, October 27, 2017 8:54 PM<br><b>To:</b> David Turner <<a href="mailto:david.turner@voltagegate.com" target="_blank">david.turner@voltagegate.com</a>><br><b>Cc:</b> <a href="mailto:wg-infosharing@kantarainitiative.org" target="_blank">wg-infosharing@<wbr>kantarainitiative.org</a><br><b>Subject:</b> Re: [WG-InfoSharing] Review CR 1.1.0 DRAFT 5<u></u><u></u></p></div></div><div><div class="h5"><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p><p class="MsoNormal">(Deep Bow) <u></u><u></u></p><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div><div><p class="MsoNormal">Thanks David for the great editing work. <u></u><u></u></p></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p><div><div><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:9.0pt;font-family:"Helvetica",sans-serif;color:black">Mark <u></u><u></u></span></p></div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="color:black"><u></u> <u></u></span></p></div></div><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:12.0pt"><u></u> <u></u></p></div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p><div><blockquote style="margin-top:5.0pt;margin-bottom:5.0pt"><div><p class="MsoNormal">On 27 Oct 2017, at 18:17, David Turner <<a href="mailto:david.turner@voltagegate.com" target="_blank">david.turner@voltagegate.com</a>> wrote:<u></u><u></u></p></div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p><div><div><p class="MsoNormal">Hello All, <u></u><u></u></p><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div><p class="MsoNormal">DRAFT 5 is now on the wiki:<u></u><u></u></p><div><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin-left:0in"><u></u><span style="font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol"><span>·<span style="font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"">        </span></span></span><u></u>Marked up version<span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:#333333"> - </span><a href="https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/download/attachments/76447870/Consent%20Receipt%20Specification%201_1_0%20DRAFT%205a.docx?version=1&modificationDate=1508987029000&api=v2" target="_blank"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:#5a8d93">Consent Receipt Specification 1_1_0 DRAFT 5a.docx</span></a><u></u><u></u></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin-left:0in"><u></u><span style="font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol"><span>·<span style="font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"">        </span></span></span><u></u>Clean version<span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:#333333"> - </span><a href="https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/download/attachments/76447870/Consent%20Receipt%20Specification%201_1_0%20DRAFT%205a%20-%20clean.docx?version=1&modificationDate=1508987041000&api=v2" target="_blank"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:#5a8d93">Consent Receipt Specification 1_1_0 DRAFT 5a - clean.docx</span></a><u></u><u></u></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin-left:0in"><u></u><span style="font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol"><span>·<span style="font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"">        </span></span></span><u></u>JSON schema<span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:#333333"> - </span><a href="https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/download/attachments/76447870/CR%20Schema%20v1_1_0%20DRAFT%205.json?version=1&modificationDate=1508987053000&api=v2" target="_blank"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:#5a8d93">CR Schema v1_1_0 DRAFT 5.json</span></a><u></u><u></u></p><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div></div><p class="MsoNormal">Please submit your comments and proposed changes to this list using a marked-up version of the Word doc or a description that uses the document's line numbers.If you want something changed or added, please provide a specific proposal for the changed/new text. It is not sufficient to say, "this paragraph requires elaboration"<u></u><u></u></p><div><p class="MsoNormal">without suggesting new text.<u></u><u></u></p></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div><div><p class="MsoNormal">The deadline for this round of comments is Nov 9. <br>------------------------------<wbr>---------------<br>I want to highlight a few things:<u></u><u></u></p><div><ol start="1" type="1"><li class="MsoNormal">I made significant changes to the layout and structure of the document:<u></u><u></u></li></ol><ol start="1" type="1"><ol start="1" type="1"><li class="MsoNormal">Table 1 and Table 2 have been combined into a single list; and<u></u><u></u></li><li class="MsoNormal">All normative parts of the document are now in one section.  <u></u><u></u></li></ol></ol><ol start="2" type="1"><li class="MsoNormal">I added some "editor's comments" to the document. They are the bright yellow text boxes with a red border. They are meant to highlight specific issues.<u></u><u></u></li></ol><div><p class="MsoNormal">One issue I want to call out is my proposal for changing the section of the schema for '<span style="font-family:"Courier New"">purpose</span>'. (This is the same as the editor's comment at line 355.) I propose changing ‘<span style="font-family:"Courier New"">purposes</span>’ to type: <span style="font-family:"Courier New"">object</span>, creating a new element called ‘<span style="font-family:"Courier New"">purpose</span>’, type: <span style="font-family:"Courier New"">object</span>, and renaming the current ‘<span style="font-family:"Courier New"">purpose</span>’ element to ‘<span style="font-family:"Courier New"">purposeDesc</span>’. This will give a cleaner and less ambiguous JSON structure.<u></u><u></u></p></div></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><p class="MsoNormal">------------------------------<wbr>-----<u></u><u></u></p></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal">Current structure:<u></u><u></u></p></div></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">purposes</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    purposeDesc</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    consentType</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    etc.</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    purposeDesc</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    consentType</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    etc.</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><p class="MsoNormal" style="margin-bottom:12.0pt">------------------------------<wbr>-----<br>Proposed structure:<u></u><u></u></p></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">purposes</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    purpose</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">        purposeDesc</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">        consentType</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">        etc.</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">    purpose</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">        purposeDesc</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">        consentType</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-family:"Courier New"">        etc.</span><u></u><u></u></p></div></div></blockquote></blockquote></div><blockquote style="margin-left:30.0pt;margin-right:0in"><div><div><div><p class="MsoNormal">------------------------------<wbr>-----<u></u><u></u></p></div></div></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div></blockquote><div><div><div><p class="MsoNormal">I'm also proposing we do the same for "<span style="font-family:"Courier New"">piiController</span>' and '<span style="font-family:"Courier New"">service</span>".<u></u><u></u></p></div></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div><div><p class="MsoNormal">David<u></u><u></u></p></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div><div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div></div></div><p class="MsoNormal">______________________________<wbr>_________________<br>WG-InfoSharing mailing list<br><a href="mailto:WG-InfoSharing@kantarainitiative.org" target="_blank">WG-InfoSharing@<wbr>kantarainitiative.org</a><br><a href="https://kantarainitiative.org/mailman/listinfo/wg-infosharing" target="_blank">https://kantarainitiative.org/<wbr>mailman/listinfo/wg-<wbr>infosharing</a><u></u><u></u></p></div></blockquote></div><p class="MsoNormal"><u></u> <u></u></p></div></div></div></div></div><br>______________________________<wbr>_________________<br>
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