[WG-InfoSharing] Review CR 1.1.0 DRAFT 5

Mark Lizar mark at openconsent.com
Thu Nov 9 12:08:13 UTC 2017


+1 - great job on structure and getting the new content in there .  Please find OpenConsent comments attached. 

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> On 9 Nov 2017, at 02:04, John Wunderlich <john at wunderlich.ca <mailto:john at wunderlich.ca>> wrote:
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> See attached track changes. I find the structural changes to the document much more readable and clear, and the changed JSON structure is more logical and matches my experiences in trying to write and match purposes for collection to types of authority necessary for using and disclosing the PII.
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> Kantara Initiative <https://kantarainitiative.org/>: Consent Receipt Specification <https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/display/infosharing/Consent+Receipt+Specification> 
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> On 30 October 2017 at 15:51, David Turner <david.turner at voltagegate.com <mailto:david.turner at voltagegate.com>> wrote:
> Thanks Mark.
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> From: Mark Lizar [mailto:mark at openconsent.com <mailto:mark at openconsent.com>] 
> Sent: Friday, October 27, 2017 8:54 PM
> To: David Turner <david.turner at voltagegate.com <mailto:david.turner at voltagegate.com>>
> Cc: wg-infosharing at kantarainitiative.org <mailto:wg-infosharing at kantarainitiative.org>
> Subject: Re: [WG-InfoSharing] Review CR 1.1.0 DRAFT 5
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> Thanks David for the great editing work. 
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> On 27 Oct 2017, at 18:17, David Turner <david.turner at voltagegate.com <mailto:david.turner at voltagegate.com>> wrote:
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> DRAFT 5 is now on the wiki:
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> ·        Marked up version - Consent Receipt Specification 1_1_0 DRAFT 5a.docx <https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/download/attachments/76447870/Consent%20Receipt%20Specification%201_1_0%20DRAFT%205a.docx?version=1&modificationDate=1508987029000&api=v2>
> ·        Clean version - Consent Receipt Specification 1_1_0 DRAFT 5a - clean.docx <https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/download/attachments/76447870/Consent%20Receipt%20Specification%201_1_0%20DRAFT%205a%20-%20clean.docx?version=1&modificationDate=1508987041000&api=v2>
> ·        JSON schema - CR Schema v1_1_0 DRAFT 5.json <https://kantarainitiative.org/confluence/download/attachments/76447870/CR%20Schema%20v1_1_0%20DRAFT%205.json?version=1&modificationDate=1508987053000&api=v2>
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> Please submit your comments and proposed changes to this list using a marked-up version of the Word doc or a description that uses the document's line numbers.If you want something changed or added, please provide a specific proposal for the changed/new text. It is not sufficient to say, "this paragraph requires elaboration"
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> The deadline for this round of comments is Nov 9. 
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> I want to highlight a few things:
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> I made significant changes to the layout and structure of the document:
> Table 1 and Table 2 have been combined into a single list; and
> All normative parts of the document are now in one section.  
> I added some "editor's comments" to the document. They are the bright yellow text boxes with a red border. They are meant to highlight specific issues.
> One issue I want to call out is my proposal for changing the section of the schema for 'purpose'. (This is the same as the editor's comment at line 355.) I propose changing ‘purposes’ to type: object, creating a new element called ‘purpose’, type: object, and renaming the current ‘purpose’ element to ‘purposeDesc’. This will give a cleaner and less ambiguous JSON structure.
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> Current structure:
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> purposes
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>     purposeDesc
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>     consentType
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>     etc.
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>     purposeDesc
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>     consentType
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>     etc.
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> Proposed structure:
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> purposes
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>     purpose
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>         purposeDesc
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>         consentType
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>         etc.
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>     purpose
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>         purposeDesc
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>         consentType
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>         etc.
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> I'm also proposing we do the same for "piiController' and 'service".
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